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Some people think that it is always an advantage to buy local products rather than those made in other countries. Do you agree or disagree?

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Promoting local produce rather than relying on imports from other countries is definitely one of the most argued
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. I am of the opinion that for any
economy
 to substantially grow it is important for the residents of that country to support the local manufacturers and producers. In
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we will see the advantages of the same as compared to consuming products of foreign countries.
Firstly
, supporting local industries makes the country more self-sustainable and improves its
economy
. When countries dependency on foreign goods is reduced because of local manufacturing the
economy
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 to go upwards.
This
 boost in the
economy
 can help the local producers as they will get more aid from the government to increase their production so that the surplus can be exported to different countries.
Secondly
, the goods produced locally would be priced fairly and would be cheaper compared to imported products. Price inflation of local produce won’t be possible as it would be controlled by the government bodies.
On the other hand
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rice of good imported are defined by the supplier of the product and can be easily inflated as it is mostly distributed by private companies.
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the import taxes and duties on those products would make it more expensive for the general public as compared to the products produced within the country. To conclude, it is important that we as citizens support local businesses to flourish and grow as it is in our interest. If our local industries grow we are more self-reliant and we do not need to depend on expensive imports and it
also
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 in scaling our
economy
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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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