Housing and accommodation has become a major problem in many countries around the world. What are some of the main factors that have contributed to this problem? What can be done to help reduce the number of homeless people?

Shelter has been one of the important
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of human
life
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, it has become
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ain concern in most of the continent worldwide. Major reasons for
this
are
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population
and
cost
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the cost
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involved in the construction of
houses
,
while
this
problem
can be solved by
controling
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controlling
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the
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population
and making affordable
houses
.
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reason for
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the
ousing
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housing
problem
is
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the
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exponential
growth of
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population
, which has made tussle
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people to adjust
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the available
accomodation
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accommodation
.
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health system,
Life
expectancy has increased dramatically as
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the birth
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disbalancedwhich
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reduced
contributed to
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number
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resident
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. To solve
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overnment
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government
. Another factor for unaffordable housing is
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the increasing
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cost of construction materials which make
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the situation
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worst
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worse
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as many live their
life
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below
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poverty line and
they
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cannot afford
building
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houses
. These persons spend most of their
life
as a dweller. To overcome
this
situation government should impose less tax on
housing related
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comodities
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commodities
.
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, if
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would have
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reduced the price of concrete and bricks, many young people
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able to make their dream
houses
.
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, housing has become one of the major
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problem
in c
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contemporary
world, but by
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reducing
population
growth and providing cheaper building materials
this
problem
can be solved to a major
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.
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