With access to the internet and social media websites, many children are exposed to a number of dangerous situations. Adults should thus limit access to the internet for their children. Do you agree or disagree?

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numerous dangerous circumstances because of easy
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believe, it is important for guardians to take
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will be elaborating points to justify my stand.
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most of the children spend their time in mobile phones, computers &
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very easily accessible. Investing
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much of their time on
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may lead to the distraction . Children will not be able to concentrate on their studies & even being in front of the electronic devices might
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ajority of young children wearing glasses nowadays which
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taking place all over the world. It will become very easy for
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hackers to misuse
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as they are very vulnerable. once the crime is taken place it cannot be blamed on the children as they are very naive to understand the criminal acts.
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most of the times we read in the newspapers many frauds related to internets the main victims are children . They are used as puppets for making
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, I can say it is very important for the parents to keep an eye online activities of the children. As
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nternet can be both boon and bane for the young minds
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it is important to use it wisely and under proper supervision.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • dangerous situations
  • limit access to the internet
  • inappropriate content
  • online predators
  • physical and mental health
  • monitoring and guiding
  • online safety
  • school curriculum
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