IELTS Writing Correction Service
Writing Samples
Band 6.5

Some people think that going to a fitness centre regularly is unnecessary. Instead, they believe that combining occasional exercise (such as going for walks) with a balanced diet is enough to stay healthy. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

#people #fitness #centre #exercise #diet
✨ Do you want to improve your IELTS writing?
Nowadays, many people hit the gym regularly to shed
weight
 and tone their appearance.
However
, some go to the gym or does activities like walking, running or swimming thrice in a week.
Also
, they try to balance their
diet
. In my experience, a balanced food pattern cum exercise plays an important role in
weight
 management. On one hand, people who do training in the fitness centre for a long time often get exhausted since they are not able to see any results for their hard work. So, they tend to lose their enthusiasm and stops their training halfway. Some will go beyond their capacity but still,they don't see any visible changes. They may feel their muscles have enlarged but they will not have a flat stomach which is their goal.
This
 pushes them to hopeless state.
On the other hand
, some will sit in the house and simply follows a
diet
 plan. There are plenty of diets available in the current world. Diets
such
 as keto, Palio, Low carbs High fats and protein-rich Carnivore diets are drawing more subscribers towards it. People who follow their
diet
 regularly
also
 feel strengthlessness.
However
, as per the famous dieticians,the key is balancing the
diet
that is
 regularizing the calories intake by the body and
also
 physical training will definitely result in the reduced
weight
 and flat tummy. Consider the success of a new startup company in Bangalore called Healthify Me which is providing services of a dietician as well as trainers to their customers.The increase in the number of subscribes states that right mixture of
diet
 and exercise can lead to
weight
 loss and toned body. So, to conclude my argument, based on the stats said above and the advice by doctors indicates that following a food plan along with workouts can only result in
weight
 loss.
Submitted by ajay92jj on

Unauthorized use and/or duplication of this material without express and written permission from this site’s author and/or owner is strictly prohibited. Excerpts and links may be used, provided that full and clear credit is given to Writing9 with appropriate and specific direction to the original content.

Fully explain your ideas

To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

Discover more tips in The Ultimate Guide to Get a Target Band Score of 7+ »— a book that's free for 🚀 Premium users.

What to do next:
Look at other essays: