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To succeed in business, one needs to know math. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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athematical ability is necessary for an enterprise. I partly agree with
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 statement. To commence with, I recognize some reasons why many people think that being able to do math is important in merchandising. It is clear that making the calculation is the nature of the
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, specifically in trading commercial products, analyze
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 report.
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 one can hire an expert to work as an account and take care of all the financial papers. Without knowing basic math, the entrepreneur would fall into trouble and their
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 would not be able to drive.
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, one that involves entrepreneurship should be equipped with other traits.
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, entrepreneurs need to have great leadership in order to lead a thriving
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, they need to identify the missions and the vision for their corporation and draw a clear path for the employees to follow.
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, a successful
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 person needs to acquire an interpersonal skill. By
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 I mean they need to understand others’ feelings and thinking.
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 could facilitate them in establishing strong and harmonious relationships with their customers, partners and employees which is important for their
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 to survive and succeed. In conclusion,
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 I do not deny the important role of math in trading activities, I believe that other characteristics
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 as being a visionary leader and an empathetic one can help a company prosperous.
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