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Countries around the world will be facing significant challenges relating not only to the environment, but population and education as well. What problems will your country face in the next ten years? How can these problems be overcome?

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In
this
 advanced era, problems
such
 as climate change, overpopulation and lack of education infrastructure are on rising at the global scale. Every
country
 has its own set of issues, and in
this
 essay,I will discuss the upcoming challenges that my nation could face in the
next
 decade and how to mitigate these problems.
To begin
, great education has become a necessity in
this
 modern period. The way of teaching is still the same as it was half a century ago. Population increasing at an enormous rate is leading to problems like mass production and pollution. The major concern for my
country
 is brain drain as there is no proper infrastructure for anything.
For example
, the basic computer courses focus only on textual knowledge, and it takes years to apply that practical knowledge.
Moreover
, India could be the
next
 populated
country
 in the world as most of its generation is still young.
Hence
, problems like these should be thought critically. These issues could be solved in various ways. It will start with political acknowledgement and the leaders should be educated to make these decisions. If uneducated people will make decisions for the educated population how can someone scope for a great future
.
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 Farmers in India to exemplify, are on a strike due to horrific decisions made by the
government
.
Additionally
, the ministry can start programs to control the population as in some parts of India a family has more than ten kids. Better incentives should be offered to educated people so that they will stay in their
country
.
Therefore
, the
government
 stringent actions are required to solve these problems. To conclude, it is the duty of people to choose educated leaders to make better decisions for their
country
 and it is the responsibility of the
government
 to do its best for its taxpayers. These problems require modern solutions and co-operation of people as well as the
government
.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Sustainability
  • Ecosystem
  • Renewable resources
  • Urbanization
  • Demographics
  • Healthcare system
  • Pension crisis
  • Curriculum development
  • Digital literacy
  • E-learning platforms
  • Lifelong learning
  • Public policy
  • Biodiversity conservation
  • Green technology
  • Population density
  • Generational equity
  • Economic disparity
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