Some children spend hours every day on their smartphones. Why is this the case? Do you think this is a positive or a negative development?
Conspicuously, In the modern world
Children
are spending a lot of their time
on smartphones, and laptops. There are many reasons for kids
spending their time
on technology. This
essay will explain the reason as well as
whether this
trend is a negative or a positive development for society
.
The preponderant cause, why the offspring are spending hours on smartphones is after COVID-19 many of the schools have switched their studies remotely and they are taking their lectures, assessments and homework online and all the offspring's study
work is done on iPads or laptops. For instance
, Capitano University is using their remote method of study
, and the teachers send all the work online to their students as well as
posting online videos of the lectures for the students so they can study
anytime. Therefore
, technology makes it possible to study
by Blackberry and children
are spending hours on phones to do networked education.
However
, according to
me, this
trend has an adverse effect on children
and society
. First and foremost, the kids
are getting addicted to phones, and they are not giving some time
to their families and friends as well as
they too be alone. In addition
to this
, spending too much time
on the screen has a negative effect on the mental and physical health of the children
. For example
, many doctors claimed that spending too many hours on screen can damage the eyesight as well as
have negative effects on the children
's minds and cause depression and anxiety. Hence
, this
development has negative consequences on the kids
as well as
on society
as the kids
are the future of society
.
In conclusion, there are many justifications why
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