More and more people are suffering from health problems caused by a modern lifestyle which can not be treated by modern medicines. Some people think that a return to traditional medicines should be encouraged. To what extent do you agree ?

There is no doubt that the modern
lifestyle
is responsible for a lot of health problems in human beings. But it does not mean that we should move away from modern medicines to traditional medicines. In my opinion, we should stick with modern medicines as these are providing us better and safe treatment, helping us to find a root cause of critical diseases, and make us follow a healthy routine. Nowadays, we all know that it is very difficult to maintain a healthy
lifestyle
as we are too busy with 9 to 5 jobs. We keep blaming that we do not have enough
time
for exercise and ultimately hold ourselves responsible
to
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the modern
lifestyle
. There is no difference between traditional and modern medicines. Modern medicines are based on traditional medicines by adding extra research
in
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them.
For example
, As far as we know that there was no way to cure cancer patients by traditional medicines. But now, we have hundreds of modern equipment, which help us to curb
the
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cancer from spreading throughout the whole body.
Furthermore
, Modern technologies are more aligned with our
lifestyle
, which can track our daily routine.
Additionally
, modern technologies are providing a lot of portable devices
such
as the Fitbit band, Apple watch and Google wearable, which are very helpful to maintain a healthy
lifestyle
.
For instance
, we can track so many things with these devices like sleeping
time
, steps,
g
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lass of water in a
day
etc. As our
day
to
day
routine is changing and becoming dependent on
these modern equipment
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to get the quick result, we should be more focused on modern medicines and equipment. Traditional medicines might be
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best source to eradicate diseases from the root but at the same
time
, these could take an ample amount of
time
. Till the
time
you get the result, the disease might have spread completely in your body.
On the other hand
, the advancement of technology, in the medical field, provides a quick and fast way to curb
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disease and share the possible outcome on your phone. So that we can take appropriate action before anything gets serious. To sum up, We should not differentiate modern and traditional medicines. We are only developing new machines and medicines based on traditional practices. We should blame our unhealthy
lifestyle
, not medicines. I believe that to maintain a healthy and modern
lifestyle
, we should avoid taking medicines. There is a very famous saying that “Healthy body breeds a healthy mind” and “An apple in a
day
keeps a doctor away”. Modern technologies are
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helping hands in fast forward life.
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