Some people think women should be allowed to join the army, the navy and the air force just like men. To what extent do you agree or disagree? Give reasons for your answer

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Many persons believe that we should give permission to female to join in various departments of an army like navy and the air force as a male. I majorly agree with the above statement and the following essay provide supportive arguments to my stand.
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and foremost argument to support my point of view is that,in
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gender base discrimination vanishes;
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, it still exists in some places. Women are competing men in each and every sector like IT,finance and banking etc. In fact, in some field girls are dominating.
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, the
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person who went to the moon on behalf of India was Kalpana Chawala, and Sunita Williams was the
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era where women treated equally as men,we should not keep any restriction on female candidates to join the army.Rather we must encourage them, so they can perform well in
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sector
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. We can take an example of Gunjan Saxena,the
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woman piolet to fly in a combat zone, and late renowned as a ‘Kargil girl’. From the above paragraph,we can deduce that if
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hance is given to women they can perform well in any field.
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, a group of people argue that women meant to become housewife, and they should look for only family and home. Though I strongly condemn
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type of mindset, it
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it logical because when girls get married she
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the responsibility of home and family, and it becomes vital when they became a mother. The role of mother is very essential in the development of children.
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, Jija bai played important role in the growth of Chatrapati Shivaji later who becomes a great warrior.Duty of the army is not a piece of cake.It demands a plethora of time and for that girls have to stay away from home for a prolonged period. It might affect the other responsibilities of women. To put it in a nutshell, in the modern era, where there is no difference between girls and boys. We should allow women to join the fighting force of the country. On contrary managing other responsibility along with serving a nation is a herculean task.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • gender equality
  • combat roles
  • physical prowess
  • stamina
  • dynamics
  • cohesion
  • resilience
  • integration
  • gender disparities
  • morale
  • recruitment
  • retention
  • biological differences
  • stereotypes
  • feminism
  • glass ceiling
  • break barriers
  • pioneer
  • groundbreaking
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