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More and more people want to buy clothes, cars and other items with famous brands. What are the reasons? Do you think it is a positive or negative development?

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There are several reasons maybe could explain why people tend to purchase products from famous companies nowadays. Personally, I believe
this
 trend has some negative impact on our society. There are three reasons that cause an increasing number of famous band’s clients.
Firstly
, top-class brands are always accompanied by high-quality produces.
For example
, the leather texture and the craft techniques that are applied to the bags of luxury brands,
such
 as Louis Vuitton, are rarer and delicacy to compare with the regular brand.
Secondly
, luxury retail stores tend to satisfy customers with good service. The after-sale service provided by famous companies is usually more decent, like a lifetime warranty and free product maintenance.
Finally
, wearing expensive clothes and using the latest electronic devices gives people more confidence and reveals the icon of wealth and success. In my opinion,
this
 trend has some adverse effects on our society at some points. In the impact of materialism and consumerism, people tend to buy expensive items regardless of the products whether they are affordable or not.
Moreover
, people purchase fancy outputs to satisfy vanity and decreasing the gap between them and the riches. Especially, youngsters are influenced more easily by the pressure from peers to show off their belongings. Because of that, young people from low-income families might use all of the money to buy a luxury item, which would bring a huge financial problem to the family budget. In conclusion, while there are some reasons to purchase famous brand products, I think people should buying it depends on the power of consumption of themselves.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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