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Since most information about culture and history can be found on the internet museums are not needed any more. To what extent do you agree or disagree

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Museums have been known to be one of the greatest attractions in many cities due to historical and cultural values that they can provide.
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nternet, most information present at the museums can be easily found and so, some people may believe that
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 type of entertainment is useless. I strongly disagree with
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, it is known that museums are an important touristic attraction, and governments around the world invest in it as a way to attract visitors to cities.
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, the bigger Historical Museum on the state of Rio de Janeiro, Brazil, stands in a small city in the mountains to engage tourists to visit and spend some time in that place.
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, museums are an excellent source of education because they can provide information about different countries and cultures of the entire world.
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, going to the museum can be an interesting activity for children, since they are exposed to a variety of data and are able to acquire knowledge in a different environment from school.
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, some schools adopted visits to museums as an activity in the children curriculum, as
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 going to the museum can be a social event, that families can enjoy together. So, it can be considered an important tool for social gathering. In conclusion, in my opinion, museums are a key source for enhancing learning skills and governments should invest money to keep their structure and
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 bring different expositions to increase the community experience.
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