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In many parts of the world there is continuous coverage of sports on television. Some people believe this discourages the young from taking part in any sport themselves. Discuss this view and give your own opinion.

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Today people have a lot of different sport where you can play with a team or a group,
for instance
, basketball, football, volleyball, hockey and so on. Some people think that the demonstration of sport on TV, it can give a bad benefit for the young generation. In
this
 essay, I'm going to write about
this
 point of view and
also
, my opinion.
First
 of all, sport is the most important thing in everyday life. The game has appeared from an early age when our ancestors did not have buildings. Games can be like a teamplay game and
also
 every man for himself. It is continuing to broadcast on the TV, and because of
this
, some social belief that the broadcasted games can give a negative influence for youngs.
Nevertheless
, it can be true, due to it can annoy teenagers that all people on TV try to impose to them. From my experience, I can give you an example, when I was 11-12 years I like to do karate that was my favourite thing.
However
, one day I changed my mind because I started to do another thing and my parents always said that you need to be fit and so on.
On the other hand
, exercises and activities are significant for all ages of the group. We must do everyday exercise if we want to live a long life and be healthy in old age. I believe that transmitted sports programmes help to attract a new generation. I think most people know
this
 feeling when you cheer on your favourite team and
this
 moment you never forget. When teenagers watch how their idols play in
this
 game, they can have a good motivation to do
this
 like their idols. In conclusion, In my opinion, coverage of sports on television has a more positive effect on the young generation than negative.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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