Longer life spans and improvements in the health of older people suggest that people over the age of sixty-five can continue to live full and active lives. In what ways can society benefit from the contribution that older people can make?

In today's world with the advancement in medical science human life are
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longer than ever before .Even the elder people can contribute to the community now .
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, older people can contribute the society by sharing some time in school with children . Because it is often seen that children are not live with their grand-parents any more and even parents do not have enough time to share interesting things with their kids .
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it will be a good thing for teenagers to spend some quality time with older people and learn things from their past experience .
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every school call senior citizens from different cities of the country to introduce with
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hild so they can learn from them.
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The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

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To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
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