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Some people thing that mobile phones are harmful for children, while others disagree. Discuss both sides and give your opinion.

#people #phones #children
Over the
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there have been a number of innovations and technological advancements that have become an integral part of a child's life, mobile phone is one of them. While some believe that
this
 will be beneficial for the younger generation, many are of the opposite opinion.
This
 essay will have a look at both sides of the argument. To start with, mobile phones have made
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 easier to communicate with people around the globe.
This
 means that children can now stay connected with their teachers and fellow students, from the comfort of their home.
In addition
, due to the feasibility of using internet over the phones, children now have all the knowledge of the world at their fingertips.
This
 doesn't only make
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lethora of books and research material available to a student
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 but
also
 introduces interactive learning for children.
Hence
, it helps in the development of the children.
On the other hand
, some people believe, mobile phones emit radiations which could destroy the brain cells, and
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 the children. Even though there is very less evidence to support that argument, but it has been proven that prolonged use of cell phones do have a negative effect on a child. Not only
this
, children tend to become addicted to playing games over the phone and become
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agitated
 when they are not allowed to do so. To cite an example, there has been a case reported a few months back, wherein the child had tried to murder his parents for not allowing him to play a game over the mobile phone. In the end, like every coin has two sides, usage of mobile phones by children has it's pros and cons.
However
, in my opinion, mobile phones are an advantage for children provided they are used for a limited amount of time and there are parental restrictions applied to them.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • excessive screen time
  • health problems
  • eye strain
  • poor posture
  • disrupted sleep patterns
  • inappropriate content
  • addiction
  • reliance
  • impair
  • social skills
  • educational tools
  • digital literacy
  • mitigated
  • parental guidance
  • safeguards
  • responsible use
  • monitored
  • development
  • benefits
  • risks
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