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Even though globalization has some very positive effects, we cant forget its negative effects. What are the disadvantages and advantages of globalization?

#globalization #effects #cant
Some people believe that
globalization
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worldwide economics only in
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eneficial way, and its drawbacks are infinitesimal and we should forget about them. I totally disagree with that, and in
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I would like to recount why. For
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, I have to mention that it is obvious that
globalization
 has benefits, by making some products more affordable for more group of people. But at the same time
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it tends to offend against laws of humanity.
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 products ,that are transported from emerging nations, utilize people as slaves, which is absolutely wrong and unethical, some of the people get
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oor wage, they have not medical, social insurances,
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which
 reveals the worst part of capitalism and
globalization
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However
,there is
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 another drawback - transportation. Transportation of goods distinctly influences to our environment, it is axiomatic, Vehicles require fuel,which
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 plenty of toxic
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emissions
 to our atmosphere. Pollution of
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tmosphere provokes global warming. Contamination of worldwide ocean entail extinction of some species of aquatic animals and lack of clean water, due to the fact that river streams are connected with the oceans, that
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 contagious by toxic emissions of oil.
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there is
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lastic pollution problem, every year we dump tonnes of plastic into
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cean. In conclusion, I would like
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say that we should control
globalization
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retty controversial topic to discuss.
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