To succeed in business, one need to know math. To what extend do you agree or disagree?

People believe that math is a crucial factor to become a successful entrepreneur.
Although
we can not deny an important role of mathematical
skill
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alculation,
otherwise
there are other skills
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eed to be concerned.
First
of all, I recognize the reasons why some people think math is significantly important to the one who
invole
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involve
in
business
, one of which is that
business
is about exchanging and trading in the
market
which needs mathematical
skill
for calculation.
For instance
,
this
skill
would support the boss to check and examine
market
analysis or calculate revenue, cost.
Therefore
, without calculating
skill
the entrepreneur might be cheated by their secretary, employees or even lose their money in daily
business
.
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I think other skills
such
as leadership and
business
sense should be carefully taken into account.
Firstly
, the
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needs leadership
skill
to organize, operate the company and make their employees listened to their command. With
this
ability, the boss could control and push
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productivity, encourage their employees to contribute more for the
business
project.
By contrast
, if the entrepreneur was not required
this
vital
skill
,
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rama could
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, workers might not
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to them and even worst destroy the company.
Secondly
,
business
sense is what the leader
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to identify the
market
, understand people’s need and clearly see the tendency of
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arket.
Otherwise
, they would
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their potential contract and customers. So the leader with a
business
mind would
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thrive
and achieve more accomplishments. In conclusion, I hold the belief that to succeed in
business
, one not only need to learn about math but they have to learn other skills too.
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