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The Internet has informed the way information is shared and consumed, but it has also created problems that did not exist before. What are the most serious problems associated with the Internet? What are the best ways to solve them?

#internet #information
Internet
 is an innovation which has revolutionalised the world. The benefits of
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nternet are numerous,
however
,there are some major drawbacks as well which we will discuss and
also
 what can be done to fix them. With the
internet
, there is always a risk of
information
 leakage or hacking.
Although
 there are many antivirus software's available in the market, still there is a risk of data being compromised.
For example
, e-mail accounts of people are hacked for vital details and used for wrong purposes. In order to fix
this
,we need to implement a high level of authentication to ensure a legitimate person gets access to the account. The web is the fastest way to spread wrong
information
. Nowadays news spread at a lightning speed, which is a good thing but
also
 has some negative effects.
For example
, people make misuse of the web to spread rumours online. To put a stop on
this
 thing, the source of
information
 should be checked or there should be some sort of procedure to check the authenticity of the news.
Inspite
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In spite
 of some serious problems like data hacking and misleading
information
, the advantages of
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nternet outweigh the disadvantages. In my opinion, the
internet
 should be used responsibly to avoid any chaos.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • cybersecurity
  • phishing
  • identity theft
  • misinformation
  • fake news
  • social isolation
  • internet addiction
  • data privacy
  • digital literacy
  • regulations
  • awareness programs
  • manipulate
  • proliferation
  • consent
  • escalated
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