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The rich are becoming richer and the poor are becoming poorer. Why is this problem? What solutions are there to tackle this problem?

Nowadays, poverty is becoming increasingly widespread in many countries while wealth is limited to a group of people all over the world.
Consequently
, poor people become poorer and the rich become richer.
This
 essay will discuss the causes of
this
 issue and offer some possible solutions to help overcome it. One of the reasons for
this
 imbalance is
that huge industries
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that huge industry
those huge industries
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 are controlled by a certain group of businessmen in all countries, especially in developing countries.
Thus
, business owners think only how to make profits and increase their wealth every day even if they will make poor people struggle to survive. To give a clear example, international brands and hypermarkets in large shopping malls always offer huge sales -up to 75%- on many items which
consequently
 makes customers stop buying from local shops and they purchase from these shops
instead
. According to a recent survey conducted by The Egyptian Ministry of Trade and Industry, 70% of customers prefer buying from large shopping centres to buying from local shops, which forces the owners of these shops to close them and lose their jobs. Regarding some possible solutions to
this
 problem, the government should increase taxes on the imported items in multinational chains and
in contrast
 decrease taxes on the domestic items sold in local shops.
This
 will help owners of these shops to continue working without having to close them
thus
 causing many employees working with them to lose their jobs too. Another solution could be that the government put strict rules to ensure that employees have a fair minimum wage and
therefore
 help them have better lives. In conclusion, the governments should take measures
such
 as reforming taxes and enforcing a minimum wage policy to help decrease the increasing gap between the rich and the poor.
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