Today more people are travelling than ever before. Why is this the case? What are the benefits of travelling for the traveller?
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coherence cohesion
Your essay is well-organized and flows logically, but there are a few areas that can be improved. Ensure all sentences are clear and concise, and watch out for minor grammatical errors that can affect readability.
task achievement
While you provide relevant examples, adding more examples or statistics to support your arguments could make your points even stronger. Also, consider expanding on the point about traveling for work to make it more comprehensive.
task achievement
You have a clear and comprehensive approach to answering the question, covering multiple aspects of why people travel more now.
coherence cohesion
The introduction and conclusion are effective, clearly setting up and summarizing your argument.
Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
The easiest way to score well on the IELTS Task 2 writing portion is to structure your writing in a solid essay format.
A strong argument essay structure can be split up into 4 paragraphs, each containing 4 sentences (except the conclusion paragraph, which only contains 3 sentences).
Stick to this essay structure:
- Paragraph 1 - Introduction
- Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
- Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
- Paragraph 4 - Conclusion