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Whether or not a person achieves their aims in life is mostly related to luck. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

#person #life #luck
Many people claim that
luck
 plays the most instrumental role in helping them achieve their goals in life. Personally, I vehemently disagree with
this
 notion as hard
work
, determination and perseverance are more important factors than
luck
 for attaining different goals. There are multifarious reasons to strengthen my viewpoint.
Firstly
, there are several people who despite all odds reach the pinnacle of success through sheer dedication and hard
work
.
For instance
, late APJ Abdul Kalam faced so much hardship in his childhood;
however
, he conquered all formidable challenges through untiring perseverance and grit. Needless to say, he achieved whatever he aimed at during his presidential tenure and in his scientific career.
Secondly
, anything which is achieved just through
luck
 does not
last
 long unless achievers put in diligent efforts to sustain it. To illustrate, people open businesses for their children;
nevertheless
, their businesses only grow if these children devote time and show dedication
towards
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 their
work
.
For example
, people may come into a lot of money due to sheer
luck
;
however
, if they do not know how to invest that money, they will soon squander it.
Lastly
, there are people who are born with physical disabilities but still
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they have a success story to tell. Take,
for instance
, Helen Keller who was deaf and blind, but with her determination and unparalleled efforts
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she became an eminent author and political activist.
Although
 she was not born with fortunes, she fought against all odds and became an epitome of hard
work
 and determination. To conclude, I firmly reiterate that
luck
 does not play a major role in achieving success and factors
such
 as perseverance, commitment and dedication are more imperative in attaining goals.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • luck
  • determination
  • hard work
  • perseverance
  • skills
  • continuous learning
  • achievements
  • opportunities
  • networking
  • personal accountability
  • diverse backgrounds
  • access to resources
  • causality
  • creative industries
  • structured fields
  • linear
  • predicated on merit
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