You are going on a short training course at a collage in Greenmount, Northern Ireland. You need somewhere to live while you are there. Write a letter to the accommodation officer at the college. In your letter, explain your situation describe the accommodation you require say when you will need it

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Dear Sir, I am writing regarding the accommodation facility at a

collage

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college

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in Greenmount, Northern Ireland. Currently, I am very happy and excited

for

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about

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this

training, practical workshop etc. My name is Kailash Kamble I am 25 years old energetic

batchlor

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bachelor

student. Recently I had send

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application

for the short term UX/UI training course and I got selected. I have completed all the necessary

documentaion

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documentation

and other requirements except the accommodation facility. I need a place to live in

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the

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mentioned location

during

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15th January to 20th

march

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this

short course.

Further

, I have already completed

online

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the online

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application

procedure which is required for

this

service. My

application

number is UX-249A.

Further

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if anything

additionally

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required please contact me anytime on cell number which is

metioned

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mentioned

application

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the application

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form along with email ID. I would appreciate

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it if

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you could do it for me as I required it on

priority

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basis. I hope to hear your reply soon. Yours faithfully, Kailash Kamble

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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

firstly
secondly
thirdly
in additional
moreover
also
for example
for instance
therefore
however
although
even though
despite

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Linking words
meeting the goal of 7 or more
1
Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
15
Grammar mistakes
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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Greeting and closing

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 7.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

7 paragraphs

161 words

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You are going on a short training course at a collage in Greenmount, Northern Ireland. You need somewhere to live while you are there. Write a letter to the accommodation officer at the college. In your letter, explain your situation describe the accommodation you require say when you will need it

Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

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