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Buying things on the Internet, such as books, air tickets and groceries, is becoming more and more popular. Do the advantages of shopping in this way outweigh the disadvantages?

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One of the most conspicuous trends of today's world is an ongoing debate among people about online shopping. While there are arguments in favour of in-store purchases, I believe the advantages of shopping via the internet outweigh the disadvantages. There is a deluge of arguments in favour of my stance. The most preponderant one is that buying online saves an enormous amount of time for the consumers.
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, If I make a list of grocery items that I need for the week, and I order them online; I can have them delivered at my home without having to travel to the supermarket.
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, online shopping will save me enough time to learn a new hobby which would not have been possible if I had to go to the shop physically. Another advantage is access to a large variety of items at the click of a button.
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 a person can physically experience the
product
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 in a store, it may not be possible to have the best bargain without comparing the
product
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 features, and the price with other brands in the market.
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, I can research the
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 features that I need and compare the various option in the online market before finalising the
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 that meets my requirements. To conclude, dealing with the option of an in-store or online purchase is one of the prevalent dilemmas that most of the people face.
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, I believe, the advancement of technology has significantly made our life easy, and we should take advantage of the benefits that it provides, especially for the convenience of shopping.
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    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • convenience
  • time-saving
  • wide selection
  • competitive prices
  • discounts
  • accessibility
  • global marketplace
  • availability
  • fraud
  • scams
  • lack of
  • physical interaction
  • personal experience
  • impersonal
  • customer service
  • delays
  • delivery
  • return process
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