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Nowadays more and more business meetings and business trainings are taking place online. Does the advantage of this development outweigh disadvantage.

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Many multinational companies or even small firms are using world wide web for their
business
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 meetings and
trainings
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training
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 on various platforms like skype, workplace,
trello
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 and many
other
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. While
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 it has multiple benefits as well as disadvantages. . I will support my stand with valid arguments in the following paragraphs.
Firstly
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, almost all the companies have
internet
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 access and they use it for various tasks. At present, many companies have excelled their work and handling foreign clients by use of
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nternet, they probably do all kind of meetings on
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nternet because it saves their precious time and money.
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, with the use of
internet
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 small startups are
also
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 trying to give free sessions and
trainings
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training
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 on the
internet
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 and advertise their
business
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.
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, Infosys, a multinational I.T company give free
business
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trainings
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throughly
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thoroughly
 on
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nternet and if anybody wants to collaborate with the company they can simply schedule meeting for expansion of
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usiness.
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, there are
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ew disadvantages
of
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 online meetings. Sometimes online gatherings can lead to fraud deal and they can cheat opposite end easily by fake documentation.
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, discussing
about
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company's financial and confidential things online may lead to
e
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conomical loss.
However
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, online
trainings
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training
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 are not effective as physical training, as people invest online for training and sometimes they may not get any acknowledgement
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 there is always a trust issue and threat of cheating on online meetings and
trainings
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training
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. In conclusion, there is no denying that online meetings may
leads
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 to many critical issues but, there are more
adavantages
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advantages
 of using
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i
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nternet in
a
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 right way and excel their
business
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 by social gathering on it.
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,
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dvantage of
this
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 development
outweigh
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d
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isadvantage.
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