Some people believe that having sport in schools is a waste of time and resources, whilst other people believe that sport in schools is a vital part of education. Discuss both these views and give your opinion

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side, many people
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gyms are paid. Not all people want to spend their money
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gym subscription for a
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buying a house or a car.
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, not having any physical activity can lead to many uncomfortable circumstances for most people. If people
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urn to bad habit as far as today’s
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healthy
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city must be subsidized for
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ad economic situation. All these measures, if implemented will help increase
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umber of people attending to the gyms. All things considered; the sedentary
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modern societies.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Physical fitness
  • Holistic development
  • Cognitive function
  • Teamwork
  • Interpersonal skills
  • Extracurricular
  • Academic achievement
  • Resource allocation
  • Curriculum
  • Inequality in opportunities
  • Life skills
  • Well-rounded education
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