You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. You are going on a month training programme to the UK and know that the head of the course would like one of the participants to be the social events' organiser. Write a letter to the Training Organiser. In your letter • expressing your interest in the role • requesting more information about it • explaining what experience you have Begin your letter as follows: Dear ..., You should write at least 150 words.

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Dear Rob, I am one of the
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of a
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training programme which is being organised by you in the UK. While navigating
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through

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the training website, it came to my notice that you would like one of the
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to be the social events' organiser. I am writing to you to express my interest
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the role. I was wondering if you could provide me
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with more

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details regarding the
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that would be organised. Information
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for
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what
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or affair the
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would be planned, how many people
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of what age group would be taking part in it. These details would make it easier to comprehend the roles and
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of the
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organiser. Here are some details regarding my background in the terms of
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organising, during my college years I have gained quite a substantial experience as I was part of the
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cultural

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club as well as prom
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committee

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. As a class representative, I was always at the
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fore-front
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when it came to planning, decorating and managing an
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, at my
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I am always the one to initiate and plan for the office parties or the
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fun games. Looking forward to hearing back from you soon. Yours Faithfully, Srishti

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