The rise of convenience foods has helped people keep up with the speed of the modern life style. What are the advantages of this trend. Do the advantages outweigh the disadvantages?

In
this
present era, many people are opting to prepare
convenience
foods due to reaching them easily.
Although
increasing consumption of them has many advantages
such
as being easy to prepare, the diversity of
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eal, the chemical ingredient in them drastically affect the health. Regardlessly, I believe that the beneficial effects overpower the detrimental ones.
First
, preparing
convenience
food
is quite easy and fast that
it
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facilitate modern life people
such
as
time
-saving. In
this
modern world, everyone is very busy and the main problem is
time
. Many of them are not able to find
time
to handle their things to do on daily basis.
Besides
, capitalism forces people to work hard and it causes lacking
of
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free-
time
obviously. Under favour of the frozen/canned foods, people become able to create free
time
for themselves and their families.
For example
, a parent has an intense work pressure does not have
time
and energy after work to cook for her/his family. But due to
convenience
food
, the family will
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dinner at least.
Secondly
, it is irrefutable that the diversity is a merit of the canned and frozen nutritions.
First
and foremost, individuals are able to reach different types of
food
which
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out of the season or produced on different territory.
For instance
, a person who lives in Europe can easily buy a can of pineapple for his Hawaii pizza. Uncontroversially,
this
is the grace of technology in
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ood sector.
On the other hand
, the producing companies put a lot of chemicals in the package goods to make them durable. Especially genetically modified organisms have enormous danger for
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uman body. The chemicals are one of the reasons of being cancer. As a conclude,
convenience
nutritions favour for
time
-saving and diversity. Yet the chemicals in them threat human health. What is healthy in
this
modern
time
? The modernising in agriculture deaden organic and healthy yield.
Nonetheless
, the merits outstrip the demerits.
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