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In many countries, very few young people read newspapers or follow the news on TV. What do you think are the causes of this? What solutions can you suggest? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience

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In
this
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 era, Youngsters are not interested in reading the
newspaper
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 and they don't like to watch TV. Young people are not interested to get to know what is going on these days and most of the
time
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 they are never interested in news.
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, most of the youngsters are busy in their own stuff.
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, They are on social media, browsing their own stuff on the internet or with the fashion industry. They are wasting their
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 on idle work. Nowadays children are busy chatting with friends and they ruin their own
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,
on the other hand
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, they are less interested to know about the news.
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, they did not want to read the
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. It is not necessary that the
newspaper
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 read by them every hour. Morning is the best
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 to know about updates about our surrounding. In many organisations, It is seen that employees are busy in their own stuff. In every organisation, there should be a limited screen
time
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. it should be implemented by the Human Resource department, That the employee should not exceed their screen
time
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. So, they can pay attention to their work and in free
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 the will get to know about the news. When they stay busy on the internet
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 they did not pay attention to their work as well. In colleges and universities, electronic devices should be banned. In conclusion, the youngster's
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 should be monitored and they should know that we cannot waste that much
time
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 on these activities. So that when they get some
time
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 they can pay attention to
newspaper
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.
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