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Although you have never formally studied computing, you have always been interested in computers. You have just read about a computer course that really interests you, but it is only for people who have completed an elementary course. Write a letter to the college enrolment officer. In your letter explain why you are writing describe your circumstances ask if a special exception can be made for you so you can enrol in the course

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Dear Mam/Sir, I am writing
this
 letter to enrol in a computer course named Advanced Video Editing Skills by using P.C. which is going to be started next semester. I would like to be admitted to
this
 course,
however
, I do not have any basic knowledge about PCs
such
 as Excel and PowerPoint. There are a few reasons that I would like to join
this
 course.
Firstly
, I love to do photography especially wedding photos in which the computer is one of the main sources of help to show my best work. Apart from that, learning video editing is not only useful for saving my time but
also
 for storing photographs for the future. I am wondering if there is any chance to enrol in your upcoming session,
although
, I read about the requirements that you mentioned on your website namely understanding of basic skills.
Nevertheless
, I am planning to join your morning class as well in which I can study Microsoft. Thanks in advance. Hope to hear from you soon. Yours Faithfully, Gurpinder Kaur
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task achievement
Ensure that your letter fully addresses all three bullet points of the task. You should expand on your circumstances that make you suitable for the course despite missing the formal prerequisite.
task achievement
Maintain a formal and respectful tone throughout the letter. Some informal phrases were used which could be made more formal.
coherence cohesion
Organize your ideas clearly and logically with appropriate paragraphing. Each paragraph should present a central idea, followed by supporting details.
coherence cohesion
Use an appropriate greeting and closing for a formal letter, such as 'Dear Sir or Madam' and 'Yours sincerely'.
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