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Some people believe that having a conversation on a mobile phone in a public or crowded place should be banned. Others feel that we should be able to talk wherever we like. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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It has long been a heated debate about whether received a call on
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obile phone in public should be forbidden or we are able to talk freely. In my own’s perspective, it is impractical that we cannot use our legal properties, to be more specific, as mobile phones, even in the public or crowded place and
this
 paper are going to cast light on two aspects of
this
 issue. On the one side, it is completely illegal and unfair that implemented a rule counter the act of receiving a call on mobile phones in public. The fact that
this
 code does not only violate the ownership, a basic term of personal rights, but
also
 commit the property rights or even constitution in various countries.
Moreover
, it is widely unacceptable that using the owned properties without harmful or illegal like handset, in public, have to be restricted or banned.
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ruly full agreement of many citizens, regardless of classes/social ladders in society.
Therefore
, the proposal of prohibiting consuming mobile phones in public are impractical as far as unlawful, in widely popular concerned. On the flip side, many people comment that makes or make or hang on a call in public is completely disturbing and annoying others if the listeners or callers raised their voice too loud,
nevertheless
,
this
 thought is partially true.
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tand in or sit in a noisy place, people exposed and approached to
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ariety of different kinds of noises, do not need to be the voice of people when talking on portable phones.
Furthermore
, if people coming out to
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ublic for only a while, they are not likely to care about the strangers or neighbourhood too much to put themselves under pressure.
Thus
, we can be used our phone in public whenever and whatever we want if it neither distorts the order public nor makes noise in a long while. To recapitulate, based on the freedom, legal permission and unrelated or harmful to surrounding people, the fact that talking on mobile phones in crowded places is an unavoidable situation and unintentional action.
Therefore
, I strongly reaffirmed that it is not worth to totally be banned
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speaking to other listeners or speakers via handphone in the public area.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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