Some people think that the best way to reduce crime is to give longer prison sentences. Others, however, believe there are better alternative ways of reducing crime. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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nseparable part of society since time immemorial. Set of the crimes is still expanding, and is not about to stop.
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, behaviour towards people who committed to a crime has changed drastically. Popular view over
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subject, that the longer and the severe punishment is the better, is now being replaced with a more humanistic and scientific point of view.
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of all, it needs to be pointed out, that the attitude towards criminals, depends on society, and its cultural and historical ancestry. For some people, serve punishment is the only way to bring justice.
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opinion is very common among religious people, who believe that the sinner must seek redemption. As a consequence, highly religious countries, enact a law with a strict crime system. The law stated in
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inds and beliefs of its citizens
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countries focused more on re-socialising criminals, than just bringing justice. It cannot be overlooked that numerous scientific researches, showed that long, and serve prison sentences might have a negative impact on a criminal.
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erson is more likely to become deeply engaged in
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riminal lifestyle. To avoid
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circumstances, Scandinavian countries have developed high-quality re-socialisation systems.
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in Sweden, criminals are provided with good accommodation, health services, and what is more they can attend special training classes, vocational schools. These actions enable criminals more convenient slide back into the free world
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after they have finished their imprisonment. What is more, the judiciary system
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never has been under
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pressure, as it is nowadays. Prisons all over the world are filled and crammed with criminals, and the costs of maintaining these spaces are relatively high. The society pays for all of the equipment and food supplies for the prisoners. In fact, the
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prison sentence is, the higher are costs of the judiciary system. To recapitulate, the arguments above, undoubtedly showed
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dvantages and disadvantages of the long prison sentences. The dispute, whether the punishment should be long or short, is not to be settled in the nearest future.
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