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Populations in developing nations are rapidly growing, people now believe that we should turn to GM crops to increase the production of food grains. Discuss the Advantages and Disadvantages of this approach.

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There is a view that due to the swift increase in
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opulation of developing countries, measures should be taken to implement more usage of Genetically engineered crops to cope up with the demand
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 food.
This
 essay will discuss both the benefits and drawbacks that result from
such
 an approach.
To begin
 with the positives, a crucial advantage that Genetically modified crops have is they can be manipulated in a way to increase the nutritional value of food.
This
 is done by
incoroporating
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incorporating
 genes for certain essential proteins
such
 as leucine and lysine.
As a result
, protein
defiency
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deficiency
diesease
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disease
 like Kwashiokar and Marasmus can be mitigated.
Furthermore
, these crops can be cultivated in arid conditions.
This
 can be achieved by producing
drought resistant
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 seeds which in turn can maintain a steady flow in the production of food grains
particulary
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particularly
 in countries affected by drought.
Nevertheless
,
this
 method does present some problems, the most obvious being the that any slight mishap in the engineering of these crops can cause adverse effects to the individual consuming them.
This
 is possible
beacuse
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because
 the process consists of a step where the traits of the natural DNA is replaced by
diffferent
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different
 ones which is a
compicated
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complicated
 procedure. Another significant disadvantage is that the use of these seeds can be restricted to the farmers as it will be owned probably by Corporate companies by the means of a patent.
This
 in turn will increase the already high debt of the farmers and cause complications in the economy. In conclusion,
Although
 GM crops can be beneficial in terms of
increasing
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 nutritional value and during
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amine, it is important to consider the effects on human health and the consequences for farmers.
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