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Some people believe that public libraries are necessary while others believe that these are not that important nowadays. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Many people opine that public libraries are beneficial / useful / important in
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nternet; others hold the opposite view. Personally, I completely accord with the notion that public libraries have an instrumental role in
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society. There are multifarious reasons to strengthen my
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Firstly
, these public libraries are accessible to everyone irrespective of caste, creed or social status.
By contrast
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igital divide is still a big issue in the world and because of
this
 millions of people are still not getting the benefits of the internet.
Therefore
, it is quite evident that libraries serve the purpose of imparting knowledge even to the remotest places.
Secondly
, there are several old manuscripts or books written in regional languages which readers can get only in libraries. More importantly, historical data which netizens
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 on the internet is not verified and
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 its authenticity is certainly doubtful.
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these reading places provide a
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 environment and
therefore
 improves concentration. More crucially, many people feel motivated to learn / read in these places as they are surrounded by avid readers.
Such
 inspiration for reading voluminous books definitely helps them to improve their reading and communication skills. Apart from
this
, when people visit libraries, they get to socialize with those sharing similar interests and
thus
 make new friends in
this
 lonely world. To conclude, I firmly reiterate that public libraries are of utmost importance as they are accessible to everyone and these spaces provide a
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 environment to read and
thus
 improve concentration and reading habits. Because of all these fundamental reasons, I believe that public libraries will forever aid in imparting knowledge to the society.
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