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Having more money and less free time is better than earning less money and having more free time. Discuss both views and state your opinion?

#money #time
Some people want to have an abundant
life
 though they have to sacrifice their
free-
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time
, while others accept to live with less money but having more spare
time
. In my opinion, I prefer the former lifestyle. One the one hand, working less and having more
time
 to spend could help individuals have more space to reflect on their
life
. If a person is too occupied with work and study, he would become stressful and his spiritual
life
 would be negatively affected.
However
, having less money in
life
 would be a struggle sometimes. By
this
 I mean those individuals tend to be restricted when they want to have more experience in
life
, which may result in
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edious
life
.
In addition
, when people have a lot of spare
time
, they tend to be overwhelmed with negative thoughts as it seems to be human’s nature to exaggerate negative situations.
On the other hand
, I would support living a
life
 with more industriousness and being less idle.
This
 type of living would give people a sense of satisfaction as they may feel like they are contributing to
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society.
For instance
, a
business man
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 like Donald Trump work non-stop for the sake of his family as well as his employees and still feel happy and satisfied with what he is doing.
This
 is because he may feel that his
life
 is meaningful as he is doing something good for others.
Furthermore
, since people have less available
time
 to spend, they would be more grounded and enjoy the moment that they have leisure
time
, especially with their family and their beloved ones.
Therefore
, every moment passes by would become more worthwhile and memorable. In conclusion, I do not think that earning less money and having more vacant
time
 is better than the
life
 in which people accomplish more wealth though they have to give up their spare
time
.
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  • financial security
  • facilitating
  • lifestyle
  • professional development
  • increased stress
  • work-life balance
  • hobbies
  • quality time
  • physical and mental health
  • financial constraints
  • luxury items
  • overall well-being
  • personal growth
  • middle ground
  • sacrificing
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