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Having more money and less free time is better than earning less money and more free time. Discuss both views and state your opinion.

#money #time
Both
wealth
 and
time
 are very precious things that a person cannot spend irresponsibly. In my opinion
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one
 must be able to manage
time
 between job and family. Working more hours in
o
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ffice and forgetting about personal
life
 has many drawbacks,
similarly
 not working for the sake of spending
time
 with family or for oneself
also
 leads to serious problems.
Firstly
, striving for
money
 by working late nights with no
time
 to spare for anyone can never result in anything good.
one
 clear example is, the majority of the people who are prone to mental illness is because of all the exhaustion from work. These days people work tirelessly to build their
wealth
 and consider
wealth
 equivalent as happiness,
this
 is clearly not a case, because if a person is rich in terms of
money
 but does not have enough
time
 to spend it with family and friends than it is of no use.
On the contrary
, if more importance is given to
time
 than
wealth
 can create a disastrous situation for anyone. Undoubtedly,
money
 is
one
 essential part of
life
 without which
one
 will be able to sustain and even live in
this
 modern world. To illustrate, if a person does not have enough
money
 to provide a
life
 for his/her family can only lead to complexities with no happiness in
life
.
Therefore
, earning
money
 by working hard is
also
 important. To summarize, I believe
one
 must strike a perfect balance between earning
money
 and taking
time
 out to enjoy is the right and difficult thing to achieve. Many multinational companies now focus on their employee's work-
life
 balance by providing leaves, sending employee's with family on holidays and by providing adequate leaves and flexible hours to create
a
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 optimum balance between work and
life
.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • financial security
  • facilitating
  • lifestyle
  • professional development
  • increased stress
  • work-life balance
  • hobbies
  • quality time
  • physical and mental health
  • financial constraints
  • luxury items
  • overall well-being
  • personal growth
  • middle ground
  • sacrificing
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