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The government should spend more money on railways rather than roads. To what extend do you agree?

#government #money #railways #roads
To some people, it would be ideal if the
overnment
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government
 is more focused to facilitate them with more rail tracks than roads. It is agreed, not only it can be an affordable
way
 to commute, it can benefit more people.
However
, it can not be the only
way
 for transportation. We have to find a balance between both ways of travelling. Rails are more time-efficient and economical.
Additionally
, it is
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nvironment-friendly
way
 to move around. A rail is always on time and there
are
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 less traffic accident with rails; Which makes rails more safe
way
 to travel than other sources. Rails would emit less carbon as compared to other vehicles.
Hence
, making it human friendly. Rails can accommodate more passengers which concludes less fuel consumption overall. To
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, consider all people using a train travelling on their own vehicles. Rails do not have frequent traffic signals like other vehicles. Which helps people to save their time and passengers would
also
 not be tired of driving either. To summarize, rails are cheaper, time-efficient, less exhausting ways to travel, but they have limitation when it comes to railway tracks. we can not have tracks passing through the main city because
this
 would affect the
opulation
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population
 badly. Upon arriving and departing of rails there would be noise which affects people.
Moreover
, It is not practical to have rail tracks run through
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treets.
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