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Many people join distance‐learning programs (study material, post, TV, Internet) and study at home, but some people think that it cannot bring the same benefit as attending colleges or universities does. Do you agree or disagree?

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Distance
 learning is one of the most important educational methods
that
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 widespread and takes place in our life. Some people think that joining
distance
 learning programmes is a necessity to keep pace with
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evelopment of education;
however
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some people consider it as not
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beneficial as attending colleges or universities. I personally believe that
distance
 learning has advantages and disadvantages that could affect
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tudent’s educational pursuit. In my view
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many people choose to pursue their graduate studies through
distance
- learning programmes or by studying at home which
this
 is the ideal choice to keep their jobs at the same time of completing their education.
In addition
, some people are interested to enroll in special courses that are not afforded by local universities but only abroad through online or blended programmes.
Besides
 that,
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nternet is the best option for learners who are curious to start their journey to learn a totally new subject when they don’t have a previous experience on it.
This
 can only happen by registering through online platforms that are offering a vast
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free and paid courses in a wide range of fields.
Finally
, we cannot disregard that
distance
 learning and e-learning are
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 adequate
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 for students when they cannot attend their schools and colleges because of unfamiliar situations
such
 as pandemics and
snowstroms
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snowstorms
.
On the other hand
,
distance
 learning still has many obstacles that will keep the prevalence
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in-person learning at colleges and universities.
First
 of all, some courses and especially science classes are having difficulties in
distance
 learning where performing experiments in labs
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 the key to understand and succeeded
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the course.
In addition
, in-person learning is important for student’s when it comes to peer collaboration and student engagement.
Finally
, teachers and professors still don’t have enough experience and they are not trained well for online courses. Obviously,
distance
 learning and study at home will be predominant in the new coming years.
However
, certain standards and regulations have to be implemented to ensure that
this
 new method will impact the educational system positively.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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