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Universities should enrol equal numbers of male and female students in all subjects.Do you agree or disagree?

#universities #enrol #numbers #students #subjects
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 regarding the average amounts of CO2 which each person emitted in four distinct countries, UK, Sweden, Italy and Portugal, measured in metric tonnes, over a 40 years
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 from 1967 to 2007. Overall, as can be seen from the graph, both Uk and Sweden experienced a downward trend in CO2 emissions per person, over
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 of 40 years.
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K, from 1967 to 1977, at approximately 11 metric tonnes.
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 Uk witnessed a moderate downward trend until 2007, to 8.5 metric tonnes.
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, in Sweden, the average amount of CO2 emissions increased sharply from 1967 to 1977, from approximately 9 to 11 metric tonnes.
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, that plummeted sharply to almost 5 metric tonnes until 2007 which was equal to the average rate of CO2 emissions in Portugal.
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 from 4 to 8 and 1 to 5 respectively.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • gender equality
  • stereotypes
  • workforce
  • discrimination
  • gender biases
  • STEM (Science, Technology, Engineering, Mathematics)
  • humanities
  • underrepresentation
  • meritocracy
  • quotas
  • academic standards
  • qualifications
  • personal interest
  • enforced gender parity
  • dropout rates
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