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The growing number of overweight people is putting as train on the health care system in an effort to deal with the health issues involved. Some people think that the best way to deal with this problem is to introduce more physical education lessons in the school curriculum. To what extent do you agree or disagree? -

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It is known that
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 activities in general, promote
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enefit for
health
 preventing diseases.
However
, the practice goes beyond
health
.
For instance
, physical
education
 lessons can learn how the students can work in
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eam; they learn how important is socialize trough the sports and doesn´t overload
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ealth
system
. Personally, I agree with the introduce more physical and activities
education
 lessons in the school schedule and I feel
this
 way for tree reasons
Firstly
, nowadays where
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technology has an important role in our life, people can do anything just pushing a bottom or one click on
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ebsite.
This
 situation goes to believe that everybody can do or solving the problems themselves and believing working alone is enough. I would say that work in
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eam is crucial for broad up.
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,
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socialize has an important role in our society, especially in students life. How like a said before, more and more has been normal students make
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 lessons or assignment alone, surfing on
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nternet or searching or sharing
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nternet. Now we have an important social problem, where students prefer
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ake their homework alone rather than make the work in
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roup. In my opinion, the physical classes
education
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socialize
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.
Nevertheless
, lonely, anti-social
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 and other practices avoid social contact can be caused bad eating habits.
For instance
, it is very normal recognized fat people associated an anti-social
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, where they can spend a lot of time using cell phones, video-games and PC games. The isolation, promoted
consequently
 high ingestion of food, little or none caloric expenditure, taking the overweight.
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, beginning with a little social isolation, can be become a burden for our
health
system
, overloading the
system
, that could be avoided introducing physical classes on school schedule. In conclusion, I would say physical practice activities are crucial for
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ody, mental,
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 and economic. Whether the government our private schools learned how important is
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pend
money making
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 projects for physical
education
 classes, our
health
system
 couldn´t be crowded caring cases that could control with just physics exercises.
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