Online shopping is now replacing shopping in stores. Do you think it is a positive or a negative development ?

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technology is advancing gradually, more than 90% of people will say that they consume online. Even though some people might view
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phenomenon negatively. In my point of view, I reckon that
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dvantages of shopping online outweigh the benefits of shopping in stores. On the one hand, some environmentalist may argue that purchase on the Internet brings more pressure on our environment. The
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problem is caused since packaging
stuffs
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are required for
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transportation.
However
, there are
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needs for plastic in the physical stores, even having more environmental-unfriendly behaviours,
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as emitting more exhausted fumes by vehicles as people need to travel to, which defeat the opinion of conserving energy.
The online
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shopping is more beneficial because it is a lot more economical from
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the perspective of time and money. Previously, time is required for people to travel to the real store and to wait for checking out, whereas the Internet allows people to just scroll and click their mouses to make consumptions, which is much less time-consuming, and the time saved can be used to do something constructive,
such
as having a quality family life.
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, according to an economic report released recently, purchase online is 20% cheaper than shopping in stores, reducing the economic burden on people, which help them to survive in the world, and
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can
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be used in more beneficial ways
such
as investment. In a word, buying goods on the Internet is still in a dramatic high rate, and I enjoy the stunning popularity in the future.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • online shopping
  • shopping in stores
  • convenience
  • accessibility
  • wide variety
  • comparative pricing
  • crowds
  • queues
  • price comparison
  • returning and exchanging items
  • local businesses
  • personal interaction
  • sensory experience
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