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Nowadays celebrities are mainly famous for their glamour and wealth than for their achievements, and this sets a bad example to young people. To what extent do you agree and disagree?

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The public figures act as role models for teenagers and `influence their
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 in several ways. The youth get mesmerised by the popularity and wealth of cabrerites. I admit that some of the famous people indulge in flaunting their possessions and looks to gain publicity. At the same time, there are some people who use their fame to inspire youth. On one hand, there are influential figures whose actions or representations can adversely impact today’s new generation. These people convey the message of being rich and beautiful is the ultimate success of
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ntertainment industry put a lot of emphasis on good looks which promote body shaming in the society. Many youngsters follow diet plans to attain ideal body shape which resulted in eating disorders and low self-esteem.
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, there are people who show the right path to teens by setting an example of hard work, persistence and intelligence for coming generations. These kinds of people have high values in their personal
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 which reflects in their work too. For illustration, the Bollywood actor Akshay Kumar is a determined, hardworking and disciplined person who mostly do make movies on social subjects
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 as woman’s rights to access better sanitation;
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 gender rights. to reduce the impacts of social stigmas. To conclude, in my opinion, celebrities can influence teens in both ways positively as well as negatively. It is the moral responsibility of influencers to utilise their power to give the right direction to their followers and try to make difference in others
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • glamour
  • wealth
  • achievements
  • portrayed
  • overshadow
  • influenced
  • lifestyles
  • unrealistic
  • expectations
  • values
  • promoting
  • hard work
  • perseverance
  • inspire
  • positive impact
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