It is common nowadays for each member of the family to have their own piece of modern technology. Some people think this will lead to a break down in family relationships and communication. (To what extent do you agree)

Presently,
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it is
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very simple that family members have their own electronic
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.
Although
several people believe that all of
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echnological inventions will make people less intimate with family and be smaller to make conversations. From my point of view, I fully agree that modern technologies are made
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relationships with others worse. Nowadays people who have technological items
such
as smartphones, are made people less sociable.
However
, several people think that these inventions do not have effects due to
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modern technologies like phones and etc., have many applications which can make contact with people.
For example
, the one application called Line, In
this
app has many functions.
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People not
only can create their groups, but
also
people can video calls or voice calls in
this
app, so if people apply essential apps in mobile phone, they will not become estranged with families and decrease communications. Even though, some people argue that electronic
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are made a lot of bad results for humans because these things can make people
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to them and do not want to do anything
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else
. Instance, more and more people particularly children have their own phones and
taplets
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tablets
, so
then
they use every time and anywhere.
This
action is made family members decline to talk together.
Thus
, they should
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use hi-tech items in
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positive
ways. To conclude I feel that every people have their own equipment, but individual uses in the wrong ways, so some people think that
this
will make people do not intimate in relations and I strongly agree that
this
is bad things to talk with people less than before.
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