You recently received a letter from a friend asking for your advice on whether to go to college or to try to get a job. You think he/ she should get a job. Write a letter to this friend. In your letter: say why she will not enjoy going to college explain why getting a job is a good idea Suggest the type of job that would be suitable.

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Dear Sara, Hope you are doing great. I received your letter and now I would like to share my idea regarding your request that Share my idea with you about start studying at a college or try to get a job. I believe that not only you but all students who have graduated from high school need to take a break from studying and shouldn't start studying in college or university immediately as it could be boring. When you try to get a career, you will know more about talents and passion, so you can make a better decision in which field you would like to continue your studies.
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, you can check the job market situations and find out which jobs are in most demand and you can make more money. I was wondering if you would like to start an entry-level position in my father's company with a title data entry role,
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you can earn and save money.
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, you have a chance to communicate with other staff from different departments and get more information about different jobs. I hope I could help you and you found my advice useful. Keep in touch Best regards, Marzi
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Coherence & Cohesion
Ensure that each paragraph presents a clear idea. The letter mixes reasons for working and information about a job in a single paragraph, which can confuse the reader.
Coherence & Cohesion
Start your letter with a proper greeting such as 'Dear [Friend's Name],' to immediately establish a personal connection.
Task Achievement
The letter must be organized into clear paragraphs, each tackling a specific part of the task. Consider using one paragraph to explain why college might not be enjoyable, a second to discuss the benefits of getting a job, and a third to suggest a suitable type of job.
Task Achievement
Provide more developed reasons and examples for why getting a job is beneficial, as well as why college might not be enjoyable, to fully respond to the task.
Task Achievement
Maintain a friendly yet formal tone throughout the letter to address the needs of a semi-formal task properly.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • academic pressures
  • financial burdens
  • tuition
  • student loans
  • uncertainty
  • work experience
  • earn money
  • practical skills
  • professional network
  • align with interests
  • growth opportunities
  • on-the-job training
  • apprenticeships
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