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Some people say that now we can see films on your phone or tablets there is no need to go the cinema. Others say that to be fully enjoyed, films need to be seen in a Cinema. Discuss both these views and give your opinion.

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Nowadays, due to the advancement in technology
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there are many people that prefer watching movies on their own devices
such
 as mobiles or tablets
instead
 of visiting cinema halls. Whereas a certain section in society still
prefer
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 watching movies in a Cineplex.
This
 topic is highly debatable. I will give my views about both aspects and
also
 share my opinion. The compatibility of watching films across electronic devices
such
 as mobiles phone or Ipads has numerous advantages for viewers. It is now extremely convenient for people to view content via OTT platforms at any place or time suitable to them. Unlike
movie
 halls, it saves people travel time and does not
also
 have a restriction on show timings. To add to
this
, they
offer
 a wider range of
movie
 options at lower price points than cinemas. To exemplify – OTT platforms like Netflix & Amazon Prime
offer
 a library of multiple movies at very reasonable subscriptions as compared to
movie
 halls that
offer
 a limited range of films at higher prices.
On the contrary
, watching films in a cinema hall offers
high quality
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 sound effects, visual graphics, seating facilities and an overall environment which cannot be replicated on devices
such
 as tablets and cell phones. A cinema hall
also
 releases
l
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atest movies which are not available on gadgets or
movie
 streaming platforms. To quote an example – Cinema halls can
offer
 special effects like 3D or 4D coupled with an ideal infrastructure and up to date releases that a viewer prefers which are not available across electronic gadgets.
However
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in my opinion, a
movie
 can only be thoroughly enjoyed in a Cineplex, primarily because of the amenities it provides which makes film watching an experience.
This
 unfortunately cannot be offered on other mechanisms like mobile phones and tablets.
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