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Most societies has its homeless people. Some people think that the best way to help them is to give them money. To what extent do you agree ?

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Few topics have drawn as much scholarly attention as homeless people in societies, especially in the past few years. Some people opine that giving
money
 to them is the best way to solve
this
 problem.
Although
 there is substantial advocacy for
this
 idea, I'm of the opinion that
this
 advocacy is unwarranted, as it fails to take into account countless drawbacks of giving
money
 to the homeless people. Primarily, by giving
money
 to homeless people, the government can face financial problems which are not good for the whole nation. On the one hand, with the
money
 funded by the governments, homeless people can't buy a home and resolve their problems. On the other, even owning a home never be a solution for homeless people.
In addition
, it creates more issues than before. Examples of
this
 scenario can be seen in many countries where governments released funds for homeless people to buy a home. Citizens who benefited by
this
 program sold their homes because they can't bear the house expenses and stock up on the basics. Admittedly, it is true that giving
money
 to homeless people may make them happy, but one cannot dismiss the deleterious effects associated with it. Rather giving
money
 to homeless citizens, the government should provide them with work where people can start earning
money
. Not only creating jobs for these people make them meet their needs, but
also
 it boosts the country's economy. The government should recognize people with any physical disabilities and provide support for them to earn some
money
 which gives them confidence. In conclusion, I would not wish to underestimate the benefits of giving
money
 to homeless people.
Nevertheless
, the effects of providing
money
 to homeless people, are far too great to ignore.
Submitted by dheerajsudarsanam on

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