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You have heard that a developer plans to build a shopping centre near your home. Write a letter to the council. In your letter • say how you heard about the plan • explain how you feel about it • ask for more information about it

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Dear Sir/Madam, I am writing to you with regards to the recent developer plans to build a shopping
centre
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 in our neighbourhood, which is quite welcoming. From the monthly newsletter update, I understand that the shopping
centre
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 will be a multi-storied building aiming to create hundreds of new jobs.
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, it will house some of the prominent local and international fashion brands, supermarket chains, food courts and a medical
centre
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. As a resident of your council, I am super excited not only because it will help to reduce the unemployment rate of our local government area but eventually will boost the property value. I believe the development of new businesses and employment will significantly contribute to our local economy and make our suburb a shopping destination for the shoppers.
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, I would like to seek
further
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 information regarding
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the car
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 park.
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 a massive shopping
centre
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 would definitely increase the local traffic and I suspect the patrons will start using the off-street parking traditionally used by the residents, like myself. Would you kindly send me some information pack outlining the plan for
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 park of the visitors? Thank you very much for your consideration. Yours faithfully, John Smith
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