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Some people believe that we cannot learn anything from the past for our life today, while others believe that history is a valuable source of information to understand human's life. Discuss both views and give your opinion. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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In recent years, it is often suggested that people can obtain useful knowledge through historical
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, whereas others assume opposite arguments. In
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 essay, I will elaborate on both aspects but personally, I agree with the benefits of ancient
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 which involve records about preparing natural disasters and way of reading trends, outweigh the apparent advantages of ignorance historical values.
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 with, there are several reasons why historical
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 benefits anymore. More importantly, advances in technology
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 been developed too much
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 than in the past.
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, historical
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 could not adapt to the citizen’s lives anymore.
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, for developing electronic gadgets, people do not use historical implement’s manuals. If we just rely on ancient’s tool
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, people will not promote
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 like nowadays.
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, for those reasons, some people maintain that people have to focus on improvement, not recollection in the past. On contrary,
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, the public could gain useful
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 over the ancient data.
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, people could prepare natural disasters for using records based on previous ones.
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, as learning from ancient experiences, relevant experts could establish prevention manners to reduce risks.
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, huge economy industries could read trends which lead to
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 to the developed countries.
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 because,
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conomy situation usually had circulated per serval decades so, if people read,
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 could bring huge benefits
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 humanity.
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, it is undeniable about history values. In conclusion, as mentioned above, outdated data,
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 looks like minor effects on human lives,
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 more likely to have positive effects on our life.
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, I am in
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 of utilizing those materials on appropriate theoretical areas.

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