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A growing number of people feel that animals should not be exploited by people and that they should have the same rights as humans, while others argue that humans must employ animals to satisfy their various needs, including uses for food and research. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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An increasing number of people believe that animals should not be used for their own advantage by people whereas, animals should be given the same rights as humans.
Conversely
, some people think that animals should be used for
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ulfilment of different need
such
 as food and research.In my opinion , animals should be used in limited quantity for the various needs of humans.
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,they should not be given the same rights as , human being. On the one hand , it is considered by many people that animals should not be used by humans for their own benefits which are not at all possible in the present scenario because most of the industries depend on the animals and they're by-products for the manufacturing of goods
such
 as , leather products , meat products and garments
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. Another factor ,
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 suggested by many people is to give equal rights to the animals ,which is not possible owing to the inability of animals to speak, write and communicate like humans.
On the other hand
 , some people believe that animals should be employed for the fulfilment of human needs which includes consumer products and research & development. Since most of the Western countries depend mainly on the animals for their food ,
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beef, lamb and chicken , so we can say that animals are important constituent for their diet.
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, the government can put some restrictions on the use of these animals to make sure that they do not get extinct.Another way can be to find some another resource to reduce the reliance on the animals and avoid their overexploitation. In conclusion , we should try to consume fewer meat products , so that we can reduce their consumption and some strict laws should be enforced by authorities to ensure the safety of animals.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Exploitation
  • Animal welfare
  • Ethical treatment
  • Vegetarianism
  • Veganism
  • Cognitive dissonance
  • Humane
  • Live stock
  • Cruelty-free
  • Bioethics
  • Conservation
  • Habitat preservation
  • Ecosystem
  • Biodiversity
  • Animal testing
  • Synthetic biology
  • Genetic engineering
  • Speciesism
  • Animal husbandry
  • Sustainable farming
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