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Most people have forgotten the meaning behind traditional or religious festivals; during festival periods, people nowadays only want to enjoy themselves. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

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Numerous characters deem people usually do not care the value of cultural and traditional celebrations; they only feel satisfaction from them now;
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, certain groups of people oppose and affirm the population have not forgotten meanings behind these festivals. I reckon citizens, especially, children and adolescents, have no idea about traditional and religious festivals.
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 of all, children grow up as adults who do not have knowledge of the history behind all those local celebrations, and tutors and parents did not tell them about the purpose of why we celebrate these festivities.
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, even older adults do not have enough comprehension, as people started to think of getting gratified as the top priority.
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, many teenagers see festivities as a way to wear fancy clothes and eating delicious foods.
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, it is an inevitable fact that people have become careless in festivals.
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, many adults assume these national unique festivals as an approach to illustrates their wealthy lives and expensive properties. The majority of cities' inhabitants hate to show their weakness and a weak point today, so they try to get looked as successful, affluent and flawless people.
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, during the Lunar new year and Happy new year, my country's people spend their all money on high-priced outfits and decorating their houses.
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, modern people' perspective and way of living transformed fests into the competition of wealth. In conclusion, from the ideas and examples given, I firmly believe people have forgotten meanings of cultural and religious celebrations, as our lifestyles became completely different compared to previous ages. We should learn about history.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Commercialization
  • Globalization
  • Cultural dilution
  • Traditional values
  • Secularization
  • Festivity
  • Heritage
  • Individualism vs. collectivism
  • Consumer culture
  • Intangible cultural heritage
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