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Some people believe that one-on-one lessons are better for learning while others think that group lessons are superior. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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The two provided plans illustrate how the Grange
park
 has been altered between 1920 and today. Looking from an overall perspective, it is clearly apparent that both fountain and pond are replaced by a rose garden and a recreation area for children, respectively. Looking at the plans more closely, it can be seen, the stage for musicians upgraded to the
amphitheater
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 for concerts.
Additionally
, the seats which were located all around the
park
 are removed.
Likewise
, four seats are located around the rose garden.
Also
, two rose gardens which one of them was located in the right corner above and the
second
 one was located in the left side of the
park
, below, are removed.
In addition
, the latter is replaced
with
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 a cafe.
Furthermore
, a water feature is added
in
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 the right side of the
park
. Into the bargain, a new entrance for car parking has been constructed underground. But two other entrance remained unchanged
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