Having more money and less free time is better than earning less money and having more free time. Discuss both views and give opinion.

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Recent years,
money
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has been necessary for our life.
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lots of people prefer having less
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and more free
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. In my opinion
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I choose
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another view
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that earning more
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and less free
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. In my opinion, having less
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make
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people feel
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. They have to think about how to manage
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. There are many things to spend
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on like food, electric fee, water fee, …
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, too much leisure
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could make people be bored and have
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egative thought. If
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erson had less
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, they would give activities to do at that
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suitably. Much spare
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make people don’t know what to do so they think about many things like relationship,
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, …
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. Earning much
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could help
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erson have a better life. Because they can do everything by themselves like buying something which their parents and their children prefer, having
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uxury trip with their family and friends, giving much lucky
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for their relatives and their parents.
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, if individuals don’t have much free
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, they will enjoy that
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. That
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would be valuable, so they don’t waste their
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when they are with their parents.
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, when they have dinner with their parents, they are not likely to use mobile phones and they would use
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ime to talk and share many
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important. All in all, people should try their best to earn much
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.
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,
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they would have less spare
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, they could be happy and satisfied. They tend to have
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etter life with many wonderful periods
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time
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • financial security
  • facilitating
  • lifestyle
  • professional development
  • increased stress
  • work-life balance
  • hobbies
  • quality time
  • physical and mental health
  • financial constraints
  • luxury items
  • overall well-being
  • personal growth
  • middle ground
  • sacrificing
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